THE CLOUDS MADE ME DO IT
I love how the first scene plays out, I write alongside my friend from day one of QKP the wonderful Coremiester! His poem really grows on you, I find his focus to be on point. Cor really gave the clouds some bite, I always envisioned them as a gang of friends with a dark side of society to portray. Sometimes sad, sometimes violent, and cursed with the same unhappiness and resent as Oswald. I find this scene to be particularly dark, as well, given that this where Oswald begins his drinking. Something possessed Oswald to have a drink, I guess the assumption is that he’s a drinker; I always envisioned him as a recovering alcoholic who struggles with using alcohol as social lubricant. This truly is he story’s climax, Oswald’s rock bottom makes him dead set on breaking his loneliness.
Khalah wrote the gloriously powerful monologue of Heavy Pattie in the last scene; if you see there is a rather beautifully voluptuous rollerblading diner mistress serving a customer in the background, meanwhile, Oswald is in the foreground drinking a beer and holding some flowers. I had a hard time convincing my lovely friend friend to write Pattie’s thoughts from the mindset of rejecting Oswald, I eventually won her over. Khalah really brought Pattie to life with her imagery, she even mentioned how it was a rainy day which is one of my favorite elements of the story.